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    The following poem was written for a contest at Wild Poetry Forum "Mirror Mirror on the Wall" in which the participant poets had to write a poem about themselves looking at themselves in the mirror. Any comments appreciated. The contest closes this evening, so I still have time to tweak it and improve it. Same can't be said for my sad old body. Ha ha.

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    ...the maitre d' said, "You're looking good." People
    only say that when you're old and saggy, and it just
    irritates the bejesus out of me.

    ................................................Garrison Keillor

    So there I was reflected in the mirror, saggy,
    bulgy, potbellied, and yes, those titties derided
    in a Merseyside pub in the Sixties (mates hustled

    me out before I gave the bloke a knuckle sandwich),
    and now it's the scrag-end of the year, chill
    last leaves clinging to oak and sycamore.

    A guy with hair like Jesus crosses the street
    with a Starbuck's latt?. You don't see long hair
    like that much anymore, but I never did wear
    it long as Lennon ? just brushing my collar.

    Never the hippie despite the odd flowered shirt
    and rainbow pants evoking derision. What happened
    to the agile boy with wavy hair, now this fat bald
    bugger, pate a-shining in the glass? But I never knew
    that lithe kid, never Michelangelo's David-presentable!

    Right hip higher than the other, worse when tired
    and a-hurting: an old geezer po-ate impersonating
    a pale sack of bones awaiting the bone man to haul
    him off in his cart with his knacker's-bound nag.
    I still plug away even if I labor in a boneyard.

    Oh, Father, look kindly down on me, I?m a satirist,
    a proud and pathetic cartoon of myself; but pitiful
    as I am, I am still your son enjoying your bounty.

    Christopher T. George
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    Good luck with it as it is Chris. I see no room for improvements....except maybe that you get yourself a kinder mirror.

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    Ha ha. Thanks, Oudeis.

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    It's a double edged sword that things look bigger in the mirror. All crane admirers take note.

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    Nice one Chris. I know nowt of poetry, just know what I like. I like it.

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    Thanks again for your interest and support, Pabs and Oudeis.
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    Beauty is in the eye of the beholder and there's far more to beauty than merely your outward appearance. Good luck with your poem and remember you still can be beautiful when your old and grey.

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