Originally Posted by
knowhowe
Yes, great stuff mate. Enjoyed it greatly and wanted to read more...
Unlike Chris, I didn't mind the interactions between man and woman- running his hand through his wife's hair was a nice touch and early on sets Joe up as a 'decent bloke'...
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I felt there was a bit too much padding though... "a strong muscular man" etc..
The food adulteration bit was interesting but too long. KISS is the golden rule of gripping fiction (and much else)- "Keep It Simple Stupid"... haha- your yarn's got a long way to go yet and you don't want to wear your reader out with excessive detail.
Get the whole book sketched up in very basic form- the skeleton upon which the muscles and flesh will later hang. The details will come later. Get the characters nailed down- you've done a good job with Joe; we feel like we know him already. Keep it coming!
All very inspiring though, almost makes me want to blow the dust off some of my unfinished yarns!
Hi Steve
It's not that I object to interactions between the man and woman. They should be in the book. It's just that I feel that in a historical novel, one should try to avoid ideas that reflect modern ideas about relationships. That is for example, maybe the man should not be as "sensitive" as we men are today. If you see what I mean.
Chris
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