A Poem What I writ.

[Steven]

A Poem What I Writ:-


I don't usually write poetry, I am more into songs but I couldn't find any music for this.
I was walking back from Mathew Street and met a *Lady of the Night* so this is about that experience. I hope you will bear with me and not be too critical ?


You Can't Fool Me



Walkin' tightly, swayin' slightly,

Yer come back lookin' slightly faded.

Mornin' sunshine, shinin' brightly

and yer lips are a faded red.

Yet you know darn well, I know yer completely,

an' yer can't fool me,

yer can't fool me.

Yer hair is tumblin' ,,,, yer hands are fumblin'

for some cash I gave you wildly.

Onward stumblin' yer lips are mumblin'

Girl, Yer know darn well,

I know you completely and yer can't fool me,

yer can't fool me.


No use in talkin' just go on walkin'

Move away you sportin' lady.

On yer nightbeat, go on walkin'

Go on being what you have to be.


'Cos yer know darn well I know you completely,

and yer can't fool me.

[ChrisGeorge]

A Poem What I Writ:-


I don't usually write poetry, I am more into songs but I couldn't find any music for this.
I was walking back from Mathew Street and met a *Lady of the Night* so this is about that experience. I hope you will bear with me and not be too critical ?


You Can't Fool Me



Walkin' tightly, swayin' slightly,

Yer come back lookin' slightly faded.

Mornin' sunshine, shinin' brightly

and yer lips are a faded red.

Yet you know darn well, I know yer completely,

an' yer can't fool me,

yer can't fool me.

Yer hair is tumblin' ,,,, yer hands are fumblin'

for some cash I gave you wildly.

Onward stumblin' yer lips are mumblin'

Girl, Yer know darn well,

I know you completely and yer can't fool me,

yer can't fool me.


No use in talkin' just go on walkin'

Move away you sportin' lady.

On yer nightbeat, go on walkin'

Go on being what you have to be.


'Cos yer know darn well I know you completely,

and yer can't fool me.


Hi Steven

This is though song-like with the repeated verses. You paint a realistic scene as well, one that we can visualize.

Now it just needs a chorus like Liverpool Lou. . . .

'Cos yer know darn well I know you completely,
and yer can't fool me.
You're a Liverpool tart
-- and that's just a start!
Just keep walkin' the street
aye, keep walkin' the street,
my Liverpool sweet.

-- Maybe??? :rolleyes:

Chris

[Steven]

Go for it 'Our Kid.' You can have the credits and royalties.

But yer can't rob the Liverpool Lou music,,,,, well yer can't though, can yer though ?


Good idea though.